Iya Ythmir

Your story is great! I love how it ends and all the gory details that I had to go through. However, it seems somehow dragging around the middle. It could ...

:D I like it! When I read the entire thing and saw the picture at the end, the whole story sort of just flashed through my mind. I second what ...

I like it. Very casual and yet with the way she's talking, I somehow had the feel that what she was talking about something really serious. It feels as if ...

It has loads of potential. No, scratch that - tons and heaps and truckfulls of it. I can almost connect to the character, poor thing. Only (and this is one ...

I really liked it. Gripping. Although somehow, the big paragraphs of yours could be broken into little paragraphs for more clarity. With the way it is, it somehow jumps from ...

I loved it! I like how you put in a character as another living being. I've been toying with the same idea for months now but I never got down ...

It was a nice and wonderful story. And I agree with it being fresh. :shock: Your descriptions are nice and I don't mind them being the way they are. But ...

I agree with Avens Dolor about the ending. I feel waaaay cheated. What happens next? :shock: It could use some work with how the suspense was delivered but I really ...

Yes, I am still hooked! 8) I am so happy that she got away without putting up much fight. Having done so would have placed her as a kind of ...

Hmm, since so many have already posted comments on this, I don't have much to say. But I really, really, really like this one! I'm loving it! I'm into werewolf ...

I could almost feel Brian's pain. I love the way he described how being blind is. I never thought of it that way. All I ever see in written works ...

I really, really, really like this! The voice of the killer in the story is so smooth, so realistic. It's as if I can hear him narrating beside me, his ...

The sequence of the events is thrilling. When Macnair was escaping, I almost thought that he'd get caught in the end. However, he didn't - which led me to wonder ...

Well, I'll second Scasha's suggestion. Though it is a very interesting prologue it all seems a bit rushed. Take time to explore the main character's feelings or if not, how ...

Suspenseful! I really liked it. Gah, I'm a sucker for manipulating-bad-person-types. 8) They always make my day. This piece made my mind wander on all the possibilities that could be ...